Comments on: My Fantasy Story http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/ Don'tTellMySecrets Mon, 01 Dec 2008 22:37:34 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=wordpress-mu-1.2.5 By: §hhhh….♥ | The End Has Finally Come….Finally http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/#comment-286 §hhhh….♥ | The End Has Finally Come….Finally Mon, 19 Jun 2006 18:36:05 +0000 http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/#comment-286 [...]     My second best post would have to be about my Fantasy story. I’d have to say this is my second best post because I wrote a lot. I mean tons. Also I got a couple of comments in return. It’s also one of the best because I posted it to seek help. I don’t think it would be that great if I didn’t ask for help.  [...] […]     My second best post would have to be about my Fantasy story. I’d have to say this is my second best post because I wrote a lot. I mean tons. Also I got a couple of comments in return. It’s also one of the best because I posted it to seek help. I don’t think it would be that great if I didn’t ask for help.  […]

]]> By: Nancy McKeand http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/#comment-5 Nancy McKeand Sun, 12 Feb 2006 01:02:16 +0000 http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/#comment-5 I enjoyed reading your story. You have watched the movie "Princess Bride", I see. At least I guess tha's where you got the idea for the poison scene with the trolls. One thing I notice is that the first chapters are much longer than the later ones. The story is much richer in those first chapters. I think you should try to expand those later chapters to make the story there more interesting. I hope you will write more stories like this. I enjoyed reading your story. You have watched the movie “Princess Bride”, I see. At least I guess tha’s where you got the idea for the poison scene with the trolls.

One thing I notice is that the first chapters are much longer than the later ones. The story is much richer in those first chapters. I think you should try to expand those later chapters to make the story there more interesting.

I hope you will write more stories like this.

]]> By: Bronwyn G http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/#comment-4 Bronwyn G Sun, 12 Feb 2006 00:08:46 +0000 http://nasya-dawn.learnerblogs.org/2006/02/10/my-fantasy-sotry/#comment-4 Hi! I really enjoyed the troll dynamics. Watch your spelling and grammar: 'Troll's' is not an accepted possessive noun, as far as I know, for instance. I particularly enjoyed the badminton and the honeymoon. I thought the opening of your story was dramatic and yet realistic. The setup of the two friends on their quest was well done - I enjoyed their relationship very much. I also enjoyed your chapter titles - so many good things were happening in the story, they needed a bit of distinguishing and highlighting. Thank you for writing this story; it made my day! I always like to hear a little more about what goes on in the lives of Elves. Hi!

I really enjoyed the troll dynamics. Watch your spelling and grammar: ‘Troll’s’ is not an accepted possessive noun, as far as I know, for instance.

I particularly enjoyed the badminton and the honeymoon. I thought the opening of your story was dramatic and yet realistic. The setup of the two friends on their quest was well done - I enjoyed their relationship very much.

I also enjoyed your chapter titles - so many good things were happening in the story, they needed a bit of distinguishing and highlighting.

Thank you for writing this story; it made my day! I always like to hear a little more about what goes on in the lives of Elves.

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